In the frigid vastness of space, the R.L.S. Legacy soared like a sleek comet. Led by the indomitable Captain Jim Hawkins, whose eyes sparkled with stardust and ambition, he and his crew forged thei…
  • blue_berry@feddit.deOP
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    11 months ago

    Thanks. So nice to hear some feedback <3

    You are right about the story. I crafted the whole thing a bit more hasty than the last ones. It should be longer and have an actual story and maybe some new characters. I also need to improve my writing. I tried a more playful style for this one, because its adventerous and so on, but its too inconsistent.

    I’m thinking about extending and re-writing it, but am not sure if I will find the time. Thanks anyways :)

    • Cris@lemmy.worldEnglish
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      11 months ago

      You’re very welcome ☺️ I don’t always have the mental energy to read a thing, but I look forward to seeing more in the future and seeing how your style evolves!